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12-02-2011, 03:37 PM
This is a teaser for the sequel to my Mer-novel Hannah's Tale. The narrator is Hannah, Alex is her husband. They have just been visiting her parents for Thanksgiving, and are on their way to their new home in a sunken freighter.

I hope you like it, but please comment even if you don't.


Saturday morning, we packed to leave. We said our good-byes, made promises to return and extracted promises to come visit us. I felt better leaving than arriving, but not because we were leaving. We were also eager to see our new home.
The day's journey was quiet and uneventful. I was a little concerned about motion-sickness, but it didn't happen. So far, Thursday was my only attack of morning sickness. Once again, we stopped to spend the night in Hardeeville. There, at the motel run by the fox-guy, we knew we would always be welcome.
I had been skeptical about tales of pregnant women being subject to strange food cravings. This is despite observing both of my sisters. I just thought it was their imaginations at work. That evening, while soaking in the tub, Alex asked me what I wanted for supper.
"Hmn...How about pizza?"
"Sounds good. There's a place that delivers."
"Deluxe with extra anchovies."
Alex crawled into the bathroom and sat next to the tub. "Did you say, sauerkraut?"
I smiled sweetly and nodded.
"I don't think they make them like that."
"Please? We passed a super-market on the way here. It's just a couple of blocks away. You can get a jar of kraut and be back before the delivery guy." I bounced and flipped my fin; sloushing water onto the floor. "Pretty please?"
"Sure, OK." He looked doubtful, but got dressed, hopped into his wheelchair and left. I drained the tub, dried off, put on a robe, crawled to the phone and called in the pizza. I ordered some hot-wings and garlic-bread as well. I was hungry and, after all, eating for two.
Alex did get back before the pizza with a big jar of kraut. I couldn't wait. I popped it open and stuck in my fingers.
"Want some?" I slurped-down a handfull. It was the most wonderful-tasting stuff ever! I giggled as the juice ran down my cleavage.
"Uh...No thanks."
Then there was a knock at the door, the delivery guy. He got through the transaction OK, despite the Merman in the wheelchair who answered his knock and the deranged, giggling Mermaid in the background sitting on the bed and noisily munching sauerkraut out of a jar. Alex separated out his half of the pizza while I dumped most of the rest of the jar on my half. It was wonderful!
Finally sated, I belched, rolled myself into the covers and slept the sleep of the blameless.

Oh, by the way, Hannah isn't usually this silly. :)

12-02-2011, 09:44 PM
Heh, cool teaser... I know nothing about the original story yet, but I can already appreciate the characters and their voices (including one who isn't usually that silly acting like it). They both come across as distinct, yet comfortably familiar and believable. I like the "merman in wheelchair" reference. :)

On an unrelated note: sauerkraut, ick! Blech! I don't even touch the stuff on its own, much less on pizza. Thankfully, I'm unlikely to get pregnant, either ;-)

12-02-2011, 11:48 PM
I was raised in southwest Ohio, which was mostly settled by Germans. There, every pizza parlor (before the chains like Pizza Hut or Domino's took over) offered sauerkraut as a topping. Sounds nasty, but it was really quite good. Alas, it's now impossible to find the stuff, even in S.W. Ohio.


12-03-2011, 08:39 AM
Now I have to try sauerkraut pizza. Sounds interesting.